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Issue 3 - Ninja Power! - Page 33 - Slater Mansion
Adam Dravian:
--- Quote from: Rijst on September 25, 2016, 11:41:56 AM ---I considered a life-size statue of myself once but because of my financial situation I had to make do with a cardboard cut out..
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Haha, good to know that I'm not the only one.
--- Quote from: Rijst on September 25, 2016, 11:41:56 AM ---The suspense is building up on this page, not least because this is still Eddie and he tends to screw things up.
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As I was writing this page, it occurred to me that the comic medium doesn't lend itself well to tension-filled sneaking-type scenes. In a film, you can see the character creeping along, and then feel the suspense as they hide in the shadows as a security guard passes or whatever. And of course it's aided by suspenseful music and editing that helps build and maintain the suspense.
In a book, you can use descriptive prose to build suspense by talking about things like the sneaking character's heart hammering and sweat trickling down his sides as he slowly reaches for a doorknob, so nervous that he's holding his breath in anticipation...
But in a comic, you have to work with still images. You can't control how long the reader will linger on each panel, so that makes it really hard to build suspense for this type of scene. Not that it's impossible to have a suspenseful sneaking scene in a comic, but it's certainly not a strength of the medium.
Anyway, after giving this page a second look, some things jumped out at me that it's lacking, so it'll be getting a minor update sometime in the next couple days.
Brianator:
--- Quote from: Adam Dravian on September 26, 2016, 01:46:42 PM ---As I was writing this page, it occurred to me that the comic medium doesn't lend itself well to tension-filled sneaking-type scenes. In a film, you can see the character creeping along, and then feel the suspense as they hide in the shadows as a security guard passes or whatever. And of course it's aided by suspenseful music and editing that helps build and maintain the suspense.
In a book, you can use descriptive prose to build suspense by talking about things like the sneaking character's heart hammering and sweat trickling down his sides as he slowly reaches for a doorknob, so nervous that he's holding his breath in anticipation...
But in a comic, you have to work with still images. You can't control how long the reader will linger on each panel, so that makes it really hard to build suspense for this type of scene. Not that it's impossible to have a suspenseful sneaking scene in a comic, but it's certainly not a strength of the medium.
Anyway, after giving this page a second look, some things jumped out at me that it's lacking, so it'll be getting a minor update sometime in the next couple days.
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Couldn't you just use the narrator dude to describe how Eddie's feeling, or perhaps use a thought bubble? As for suspenseful music, the reader could listen to one of the synth music tracks from the unofficial soundtrack or perhaps maybe something like the Mission Impossible theme song or if the person's feeling kinda silly, then perhaps something like Rock Lobster.
Another thing, the whole Eddie going into stealth mode and the exclamation point kinda reminds me of Metal Gear. Who knows, maybe Eddie will end up sneaking around in a cardboard box or there'll be a guard that says, "I feel asleep" or something.
Adam Dravian:
--- Quote from: Magnetron on October 03, 2016, 11:07:36 PM ---Couldn't you just use the narrator dude to describe how Eddie's feeling, or perhaps use a thought bubble? As for suspenseful music, the reader could listen to one of the synth music tracks from the unofficial soundtrack or perhaps maybe something like the Mission Impossible theme song or if the person's feeling kinda silly, then perhaps something like Rock Lobster.
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If we really wanted to bring out the suspense in this scene, we'd need to slow down the pace a bit, but like I said before, we need to reach the end point of the Issue before it gets too big to be printed as a standard comic issue. So Eddie breaking into the Slater mansion will be played more for comedy than suspense.
However, one of the changes that Jessica will be implementing to the page does bring back the Narrator Dude, as it seemed like a fitting time to use him. We haven't implemented the changes yet because Jessica's currently scrambling to finish art for some books that are coming out in October. She's just about done, then she'll be back to kicking ass on the comic.
--- Quote from: Magnetron on October 03, 2016, 11:07:36 PM ---Another thing, the whole Eddie going into stealth mode and the exclamation point kinda reminds me of Metal Gear. Who knows, maybe Eddie will end up sneaking around in a cardboard box or there'll be a guard that says, "I feel asleep" or something.
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Heheh, yeah. It's impossible for me to see an exclamation point appear over a character's head and not think of Metal Gear.
Brianator:
--- Quote from: Adam Dravian on October 04, 2016, 07:39:08 AM ---If we really wanted to bring out the suspense in this scene, we'd need to slow down the pace a bit, but like I said before, we need to reach the end point of the Issue before it gets too big to be printed as a standard comic issue. So Eddie breaking into the Slater mansion will be played more for comedy than suspense.
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Okay, so is it going to be anything like this scene from The Naked Gun?
--- Quote from: Adam Dravian on October 04, 2016, 07:39:08 AM ---However, one of the changes that Jessica will be implementing to the page does bring back the Narrator Dude, as it seemed like a fitting time to use him. We haven't implemented the changes yet because Jessica's currently scrambling to finish art for some books that are coming out in October. She's just about done, then she'll be back to kicking ass on the comic.
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I assume that some of the artwork she's working on involves the book you're releasing, right?
Adam Dravian:
--- Quote from: Magnetron on October 04, 2016, 06:24:20 PM ---Okay, so is it going to be anything like this scene from The Naked Gun?
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Ha, nailed it! But seriously, I wonder how many panels it would take to accurately portray that scene, with all the fast-paced sight gags. Probably at least five pages worth. Unless the panels were really small, I guess.
--- Quote from: Magnetron on October 04, 2016, 06:24:20 PM ---I assume that some of the artwork she's working on involves the book you're releasing, right?
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Yep, but first she's doing art for an upcoming novel by this dude named Mike Leon. His is the priority right now since he payed her with money and I only pay her in cuddles.
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